Tuesday 25 May 2010

Teaser Tuesday

Here's my teaser. Tell me what you think!

Background info: Giaan's been handed a bag by his uncle and told to board a bus.

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*Snip*

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PS: Lost ... oh dear. I'm still crying! :(

11 comments:

  1. I love the sense of rhythm and repetition in this in lines like, "He had to know for sure, had to see" -- it brings out a really strong voice. Awesome :D

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  2. My favourite parts: the sentences about blazing the skies in a fiery chariot and the "Welcome to the family business".

    Are you finished the whole ms yet???

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  3. @ Kathy, finished the first draft - 23 episodes/chapters, and two volumes. Now working on the second draft ;)

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  4. i just love this whole tease...especially the paragraph about Raza being gone. Permenantly. as always, great snip! :)

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  5. Poor Giaan :( I feel so bad for him! He's got to escape somehowww. Great voice though, and compelling scene :)

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  6. Your teasers are my favorite ones to look forward to each week. Hopefully Giaan escapes somehow..

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  7. Aww poor Giaan... Awesome voice and great writing as usual :)

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  8. Oh wow, I remember loving your snips on this work. It's great! I really hope Giaan comes out okay!

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  9. Poor, poor Giaan--awesome snip! You really do a fantastic job at capturing close third--so much voice here! :)

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  10. Awww, yikes! I feel so bad for Giaan! I mean, to be sent to die by your own family members! How horrible. Awesome tease!

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  11. I flailed and made a HJDGHJSDGFJSD noise when I reached the end, because I had to read more. Gah, this is so good! I wouldn't put this book down. So much emotion and suspense, awesome work!

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