Tuesday, 25 May 2010

Teaser Tuesday

Here's my teaser. Tell me what you think!

Background info: Giaan's been handed a bag by his uncle and told to board a bus.

Snippet Starts:

*Snip*

Snippet Ends.

PS: Lost ... oh dear. I'm still crying! :(
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11 comments:

  1. Vee25 May 2010 at 12:55

    I love the sense of rhythm and repetition in this in lines like, "He had to know for sure, had to see" -- it brings out a really strong voice. Awesome :D

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  2. Kathy Bradey25 May 2010 at 13:03

    My favourite parts: the sentences about blazing the skies in a fiery chariot and the "Welcome to the family business".

    Are you finished the whole ms yet???

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  3. Glen Akin25 May 2010 at 13:07

    @ Kathy, finished the first draft - 23 episodes/chapters, and two volumes. Now working on the second draft ;)

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  4. Unknown25 May 2010 at 15:10

    i just love this whole tease...especially the paragraph about Raza being gone. Permenantly. as always, great snip! :)

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  5. Ellen25 May 2010 at 15:10

    Poor Giaan :( I feel so bad for him! He's got to escape somehowww. Great voice though, and compelling scene :)

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  6. Cheyanne25 May 2010 at 15:30

    Your teasers are my favorite ones to look forward to each week. Hopefully Giaan escapes somehow..

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  7. Karla Calalang25 May 2010 at 15:39

    Aww poor Giaan... Awesome voice and great writing as usual :)

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  8. J.S. Wood25 May 2010 at 17:07

    Oh wow, I remember loving your snips on this work. It's great! I really hope Giaan comes out okay!

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  9. Debra Driza25 May 2010 at 18:51

    Poor, poor Giaan--awesome snip! You really do a fantastic job at capturing close third--so much voice here! :)

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  10. Remilda Graystone25 May 2010 at 20:26

    Awww, yikes! I feel so bad for Giaan! I mean, to be sent to die by your own family members! How horrible. Awesome tease!

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  11. Brianne Carter25 May 2010 at 20:52

    I flailed and made a HJDGHJSDGFJSD noise when I reached the end, because I had to read more. Gah, this is so good! I wouldn't put this book down. So much emotion and suspense, awesome work!

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