I'm on the road with my dream in a cart, pulling it along into reality. This is the chronicle of my journey...
Here's my teaser. Tell me what you think!
Background info: Giaan's been handed a bag by his uncle and told to board a bus.
PS: Lost ... oh dear. I'm still crying! :(
I love the sense of rhythm and repetition in this in lines like, "He had to know for sure, had to see" -- it brings out a really strong voice. Awesome :D
My favourite parts: the sentences about blazing the skies in a fiery chariot and the "Welcome to the family business".Are you finished the whole ms yet???
@ Kathy, finished the first draft - 23 episodes/chapters, and two volumes. Now working on the second draft ;)
i just love this whole tease...especially the paragraph about Raza being gone. Permenantly. as always, great snip! :)
Poor Giaan :( I feel so bad for him! He's got to escape somehowww. Great voice though, and compelling scene :)
Your teasers are my favorite ones to look forward to each week. Hopefully Giaan escapes somehow..
Aww poor Giaan... Awesome voice and great writing as usual :)
Oh wow, I remember loving your snips on this work. It's great! I really hope Giaan comes out okay!
Poor, poor Giaan--awesome snip! You really do a fantastic job at capturing close third--so much voice here! :)
Awww, yikes! I feel so bad for Giaan! I mean, to be sent to die by your own family members! How horrible. Awesome tease!
I flailed and made a HJDGHJSDGFJSD noise when I reached the end, because I had to read more. Gah, this is so good! I wouldn't put this book down. So much emotion and suspense, awesome work!
Keep it clean and constructive. Thanks.