I'm on the road with my dream in a cart, pulling it along into reality. This is the chronicle of my journey...
Ah, my favourite day of the week, when I get to share a little bit of me to the world ... to you guys. Enjoy :D
Nice tension here!
"but your son is kind of a dick" - HAHA! The interaction between these characters is so great and tension-filled. I love it! Awesome teaser :)
'your son is kind of dick' ahahahahaa! also, i half expect giaan to come back at Julian with a 'yes, actually i did' comment there at the end! lol...as always, a great tease! :)
"Uncle Yashpal handing him a bomb like it was an ordinary chocolate bar"I especially like this line! Nice tease.
Good job, their banter is kind of Harry Potter-Draco Malfoy-esque. Though if you're not a Rowling fan, not sure how you'll take that comparison!
@ Angelica: me = biggest Rowling fan! :D Cheers!!!
Loved the interaction between your characters! The dialogue was great. Definitely put a smile on my face. :DP.S. - Thanks for the kind words on my blog. <33
I liked the tension in this piece.
Love the entire confrontation between Damien and Giaan! So much tension. And I loved Julian coming into the scene. I'm really curious to see what happens to the relationship between Damien and Giaan. Nice work as always!
Nice banter. I am curious why the father wants the two to be friends, which I hope that is what you wanted. Isn't the term "Perfect" something referred to in Harry Potter? You are strong with your dialouge. I really enjoyed it.
@ RAD - yes, that's what I wanted. Julian is a pastor. He loves Giaan as a second son. Naturally he would want Giaan and his biological son to get along, but they don't, which is a pain, but he's confident all that will change somedayAs for "prefect", it's not a term invented by Rowling for Harry Potter. It's a term we use at our schools here in England. Prefects are students appointed by schools to carry out different duties - could be health, hostel, head boy, head girl, etc. ;)
Keep it clean and constructive. Thanks.