Tuesday, 15 June 2010

Teaser Tuesday

I had a supervisor's meeting today, so my teaser's a little late.

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*Gone with the wind*

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14 comments:

  1. Unknown15 June 2010 at 18:36

    whew! i could feel Damian's hackles raising there at the end. and i didnt know Giaan had such a mean streak in him. I like it!

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  2. X15 June 2010 at 18:52

    That last line - OUCH. Giaan's really...kind of awesome :D Great tease!

    Also Nigerian (Yoruba) writers ftw!! :D

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  3. Kaitlin Ward15 June 2010 at 18:59

    What an argument!

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  4. Rebecca A. Rogers15 June 2010 at 19:14

    I really love your narrative. You're so good at getting the reader inside the character's head. :))

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  5. Ellen15 June 2010 at 22:47

    Ooo, his fiestiness emerges. And I like it! Definitely sympathizing with him even more now ;)

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  6. Anonymous15 June 2010 at 23:56

    Hahaha, love the tension in this and really liked the My father's a pastor. It's his job to care about people-line. Very cool :D

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  7. Brianne Carter16 June 2010 at 02:05

    Um, I yelled at OH SNAP at the end and made a strange sort of flaily motion. This is a good thing. Yay Giaan! I love this SO MUCH. I could totally feel the tension, and I hate Damian as much as I love Giaan, so lots. Just fantastic all around, really :D

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  8. Unknown16 June 2010 at 03:29

    Wow, this is pretty heated! I love "ridiculous chaotic hair", :)
    Awesome tease!

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  9. Angelica R. Jackson16 June 2010 at 03:53

    Way to keep the tension high, both between the characters and by raising good questions,like is Giaan's comment going to push Damian to do something back, and maybe make Giaan regret poking the bear?

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  10. J.S. Wood16 June 2010 at 05:33

    First I always love your snips and miss them when I don't do Teasers. Second I loved this: "how on earth Julian could have fathered such an excuse for a human being." Priceless. Third the whole snip was awesome!

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  11. LizPage16 June 2010 at 15:06

    Eek I love that Giaan is getting tough. The descriptions of Damian is awesome and in such a great adolescent voice. Love the new layout too :)

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  12. LizPage16 June 2010 at 21:57

    PS. I gave you an award. Yayyy awards

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  13. Karla Calalang16 June 2010 at 22:26

    Wowwww I love it! So good! Loving the dialogue too :D

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  14. Brianne Carter18 June 2010 at 03:52

    I gave you an award on my blog :)

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