I'm on the road with my dream in a cart, pulling it along into reality. This is the chronicle of my journey...
I had a supervisor's meeting today, so my teaser's a little late.
whew! i could feel Damian's hackles raising there at the end. and i didnt know Giaan had such a mean streak in him. I like it!
That last line - OUCH. Giaan's really...kind of awesome :D Great tease!Also Nigerian (Yoruba) writers ftw!! :D
What an argument!
I really love your narrative. You're so good at getting the reader inside the character's head. :))
Ooo, his fiestiness emerges. And I like it! Definitely sympathizing with him even more now ;)
Hahaha, love the tension in this and really liked the My father's a pastor. It's his job to care about people-line. Very cool :D
Um, I yelled at OH SNAP at the end and made a strange sort of flaily motion. This is a good thing. Yay Giaan! I love this SO MUCH. I could totally feel the tension, and I hate Damian as much as I love Giaan, so lots. Just fantastic all around, really :D
Wow, this is pretty heated! I love "ridiculous chaotic hair", :)Awesome tease!
Way to keep the tension high, both between the characters and by raising good questions,like is Giaan's comment going to push Damian to do something back, and maybe make Giaan regret poking the bear?
First I always love your snips and miss them when I don't do Teasers. Second I loved this: "how on earth Julian could have fathered such an excuse for a human being." Priceless. Third the whole snip was awesome!
Eek I love that Giaan is getting tough. The descriptions of Damian is awesome and in such a great adolescent voice. Love the new layout too :)
PS. I gave you an award. Yayyy awards
Wowwww I love it! So good! Loving the dialogue too :D
I gave you an award on my blog :)
Keep it clean and constructive. Thanks.