Tuesday 27 April 2010

Teaser Tuesday

Teasers are good for your health. The UK's Secretary of State for Health, Andy Burnham, and the United States Secretary of Health and Human Services, Kathleen Sebelius (awesome last name for a villain. I'm totally using it for one of my characters. Thanks Kathleen), said so. I kid you not :D

Just a little background info for those who haven't read my previous teasers: Giaan is Pakistani, hence his unusual name. (I don't find it unusual, as I have lots of friends from the international community, but some people do. So, no - in case you're thinking it, Giaan is not an alien name. It's not a traditional American or British name, but that doesn't mean it's a name from Mars.) Aletea is half-Indian-half-white British (again, Aletea is an Indian name). Aletea is Giaan's girlfriend and Mr Diggavi is Aletea's father.

In this scene Aletea and Giaan are on their way to Giaan's house after shopping in London.

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Sadly Giaan's fun time has come to an end. From here on, it's going to be tough for him.

21 comments:

  1. OH NO!!! I hope he doesnt yank Giaan in with that hook...ouch!

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  2. Is it weird that I kind of like Uncle Yashpal? And, poor Giaan...I really don't want his fun time to end, but well, the story must go on, huh? Great tease! more please :)

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  3. I like your descriptions. Very acute. And Uncle yashpal sounds like an extremely interesting character :)

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  4. @ Karla, lol no, it's not weird. But I wonder if your feelings will remain the same after next week's teaser. Lol i love Uncle Yashpal too.

    @ Anonymous lol hopefully not!

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  5. Remilda, I'm publishing your comment through me, because for some reason Blogger is refusing to let me publish your comment:

    "I feel like every week I'm repeating myself! Oh, wait. I am! This tease was awesome. I love your choice of names, by the way. It's one of my favorite parts of beginning a story, and the fact that I haven't heard of half of the names you've used makes me smile. (Yeah, I have a thing for uncommon names.) But they're not weird or anything like that, which is why they're not uncommon cringe-worthy names.
    Loved it!"

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  6. Wonderful, wonderful descriptions! I'm interested to see what happens to Giaan next week. Great snip! :)

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  7. Love it! Kids are reading To Kill a Mockingbird right now, and Uncle Yashpal's house reminds me of the Radley house!

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  8. Awesome tease! Too bad the fun times will have to end! Can't wait to read more next week!

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  9. Yashpal was a total surprise! i expected a dishevelled grumpy looking old timer, not captain hook...lololol....i definitely did NOT see that coming. keep it up!

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  10. I'm kind of freaked out by the hook. loool XD

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  11. The descriptions ROCK!! I will admit I'm a little creeped out by the hook too, LOL, but I think it fits! :D

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  12. Your descriptions are so vivid, and Uncle Yashpal sounds like quite a character. :)

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  13. Amazing descriptions. I hope he doesn't get hooked!! I love this part - "In this day and age, with the availability of life-like prosthetic body parts, Uncle Yashpal chose to don a hook. And it made him look fearsome. Add that to his impressive build and you had yourself a bona fide monster."

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  14. You painted a really great description of the scene. Love it.

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  15. @Karla N -- I'm totally there with ya on the liking the creepy Uncle guy!
    And gorgeous descriptions, nice job :D

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  16. Your description of the street and Uncle Yashpal are beautiful. And the hook? Brilliant.

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  17. This teaser was funny. I really liked the paragraph where you described Uncle Yashpal. He wears a hook. Wow. A hook, of all things. He must live off of other people's fear. But I agree with Karla. I like Uncle Yashpal too. Great tease!

    And Blogger totally has something against me. I knew it.

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  18. Wonderful descriptions, especially of Uncle Yashpal. Very intriguing. Pulls me in. Makes me want to read next weeks teaser! :)

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  19. Great descriptions! I really want to hear more about the uncle! :D

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  20. Loved this image..."his profuse black beard zigzagged to his chest"

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