Someone in AW suggested we keep our teasers in the range of 500 words. I couldn't agree more. Lol Actually, I agree because I'm running out of teasers. Also, because it's easier for me to read everyone's teasers in time to get back to my writing. I want to read everyone's teasers. I love doing it. Besides learning from them, I get that amazing feeling of visiting different worlds and meeting new, interesting people – characters born out of minds far more creative than mine. It's a blessing.
So, here's my teaser. It's short, but I hope you enjoy it, nonetheless.
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I definitely see the need in some instances to cut teases down, but not so here. I could read and read this story. Once again, great snip!
ReplyDeleteoh! and i just loved this line: But Uncle Yashpal did not require reasons, justified or baseless, to hate. He hated simply because he could afford to, period.
Ooohhh. I like this. Your writing is quite good =]. Your character Aletea seems like my type of girl!
ReplyDeleteThanks Amanda :)
ReplyDeleteKarla, lol cheers
I love your writing SO much! :D Awesome snip!
ReplyDeleteNice conflict setup! Crisp and quick. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI love Aletea already, she's a tough one. Great snip!
ReplyDeleteI just Love Giaan and Aletea!*steals them away and hides them in pocket* This was great. Uncle Yashpal sounds like a right pain in the rear but in an interesting way. I loved this line: He hated simply because he could afford to, period.
ReplyDeleteI love the crispness of your style. The writing is so sharp and that really makes me pay attention to everything that's going on. Loved the characters (Aletea especially :)) too :D
ReplyDeleteNow this is a POV we need. Too often, I'll read about love sick girls, girls longing for boys, girls bending to be what a boy wants. But to see how a guy thinks and the qualities he admires - that's a nice change of pace.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet. Love hearing her opinion on the hate she sees.
ReplyDeleteI feel like every week I'm repeating myself! Oh, wait. I am! This tease was awesome. I love your choice of names, by the way. It's one of my favorite parts of beginning a story, and the fact that I haven't heard of half of the names you've used makes me smile. (Yeah, I have a thing for uncommon names.) But they're not weird or anything like that, which is why they're not uncommon cringe-worthy names.
ReplyDeleteLoved it!
I really like Aletea!!
ReplyDeleteVery cool snip! You have a unique voice and your MC has unique things to say--I like it!
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