Tuesday 13 April 2010

Teaser Tuesday

Someone in AW suggested we keep our teasers in the range of 500 words. I couldn't agree more. Lol Actually, I agree because I'm running out of teasers. Also, because it's easier for me to read everyone's teasers in time to get back to my writing. I want to read everyone's teasers. I love doing it. Besides learning from them, I get that amazing feeling of visiting different worlds and meeting new, interesting people – characters born out of minds far more creative than mine. It's a blessing.

So, here's my teaser. It's short, but I hope you enjoy it, nonetheless.

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13 comments:

  1. I definitely see the need in some instances to cut teases down, but not so here. I could read and read this story. Once again, great snip!

    oh! and i just loved this line: But Uncle Yashpal did not require reasons, justified or baseless, to hate. He hated simply because he could afford to, period.

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  2. Ooohhh. I like this. Your writing is quite good =]. Your character Aletea seems like my type of girl!

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  3. Thanks Amanda :)

    Karla, lol cheers

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  4. I love your writing SO much! :D Awesome snip!

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  5. Nice conflict setup! Crisp and quick. Good job!

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  6. I love Aletea already, she's a tough one. Great snip!

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  7. I just Love Giaan and Aletea!*steals them away and hides them in pocket* This was great. Uncle Yashpal sounds like a right pain in the rear but in an interesting way. I loved this line: He hated simply because he could afford to, period.

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  8. I love the crispness of your style. The writing is so sharp and that really makes me pay attention to everything that's going on. Loved the characters (Aletea especially :)) too :D

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  9. Now this is a POV we need. Too often, I'll read about love sick girls, girls longing for boys, girls bending to be what a boy wants. But to see how a guy thinks and the qualities he admires - that's a nice change of pace.

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  10. Great snippet. Love hearing her opinion on the hate she sees.

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  11. I feel like every week I'm repeating myself! Oh, wait. I am! This tease was awesome. I love your choice of names, by the way. It's one of my favorite parts of beginning a story, and the fact that I haven't heard of half of the names you've used makes me smile. (Yeah, I have a thing for uncommon names.) But they're not weird or anything like that, which is why they're not uncommon cringe-worthy names.

    Loved it!

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  12. Very cool snip! You have a unique voice and your MC has unique things to say--I like it!

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