"Giaan needed more than just words to stand toe-to-toe with the man. He needed an impenetrable poise ... and probably a bulletproof vest on top of that" - Love it! Your descriptions and the flow of the third person pov really amaze me every single time. Awesome tease!
Hah, I loved this! I thought it was really funny. The image of Giaan looking frightened under Mr. Diggavi's stare--hilarious! I think it's because I've always pictured him (from the snippets you've posted) as fearless.
Remilda, yeah, Giaan is pictured as fearless by his friends as well. Hopefully, if i do get to put up a teaser that's written in Jon's POV you'll see how people see Giaan.
Corrine lol Giaan is a pakistani name, as his parents are from Pakistan. And Aletea is an Indian name, as she's half Indian. She has an English name too, but I can't remember. It's in my outline file ;)
"Giaan needed more than just words to stand toe-to-toe with the man. He needed an impenetrable poise ... and probably a bulletproof vest on top of that" - Love it!
ReplyDeleteYour descriptions and the flow of the third person pov really amaze me every single time. Awesome tease!
Loved this! This bit made me LOL: It was as if the man had installed a "Giaan Alarm" to inform him of Giaan's presence outside his house.
ReplyDeleteI'm really interested in the characters here. Forbidden relationships are my fave.
ReplyDeleteA Giaan alarm! ha! classic. :)
ReplyDeleteOkay, this might sound weird, but I really appreciate the varied sentence structures in this. It makes the prose smooth and inviting.
ReplyDeleteHah, I loved this! I thought it was really funny. The image of Giaan looking frightened under Mr. Diggavi's stare--hilarious! I think it's because I've always pictured him (from the snippets you've posted) as fearless.
ReplyDeleteAwesome tease! :D
All the names made this a little difficult to follow, but definitely worth it. Liked the Giaan alarm!
ReplyDeleteCrazy dads, eh. "Giaan Alarm" Heh.
ReplyDeleteRemilda, yeah, Giaan is pictured as fearless by his friends as well. Hopefully, if i do get to put up a teaser that's written in Jon's POV you'll see how people see Giaan.
ReplyDeleteCorrine lol Giaan is a pakistani name, as his parents are from Pakistan. And Aletea is an Indian name, as she's half Indian. She has an English name too, but I can't remember. It's in my outline file ;)
Glen, just gave you an award on my blog!=)
ReplyDeleteCheerios!
HA this was great! You always pull me in with your teasers! Great job, can't wait to see how it goes.
ReplyDeleteI loved this, you pulled me in so quickly it was addicting!!! I can't wait to see how it goes! I came to visit on the right day!!
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